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e john e 
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(5/8/06 8:02 pm)
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one moon's


phases pull
me to you

and when
you're not
around i

dance inside
and under
not even
moving

moonlight
in your eyes
a few miles
away

your colors
are perfect
pastel against
the real

the chill is
in the air

all is metaphor
spanish
in the park
cold coffee
and cream

embrace me
once more
by share of night
i touch you
soft fingertips
bright


~


5 8 06





Edited by: e john e  at: 5/10/06 11:53 am
Nicholas J
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(5/9/06 11:57 am)
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ah...

john sneaks out

and then slips away

unseen


noi siamo commossi fino alle lacrime...

Edited by: Nicholas J at: 5/9/06 12:00 pm
LetaJo
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(5/9/06 12:14 pm)
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New Post hmmm...
something is really erotic here about cold coffee with cream...is that weird?

Enjoyed this, John

pjsnights 
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(5/9/06 2:32 pm)
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this is a beautiful love song. a person getting this would be all tingles when she reads it.

pj

Edited by: pjsnights  at: 5/9/06 2:32 pm
nativedancer
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(5/9/06 5:01 pm)
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exhilirating, john! the hallmark people are all hiding their heads in shame! how about dropping "the next moon" and just pull that last stuff together?

Tasha1 
little suzy sunshine
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(5/9/06 5:33 pm)
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LOL christine!


it kinda made me feel like playing

brown eyed girl by van morrison


:4zeroandtasha

e john e 
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(5/10/06 11:51 am)
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New Post thanks all
jim, i dunno what i was doing there,
something got twisted in quick rewriting and stuff,
will fix temporarily, at least, thanks a lot

dunno if i like the word HALLMARK on a thread of mine,
unless it is used in a
non-corporate sense, heh

tasha her eyes are green

"i have abosolutely no idea what's going on..." Towlie


johnlie

Nicholas J
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(5/10/06 12:31 pm)
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all is metaphor....

remind me of neruda....

in il postino when the postman asks:

then is the whole world a metaphor for something else?

e john e 
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(5/10/06 12:44 pm)
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New Post that's where
it comes from, yes

j.

Dorothy D Mienko
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(5/10/06 12:49 pm)
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I never give up on poems with moons in them.
I think I am a moon junky-

this is soft touch lovely
dorothy

Nicholas J
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(5/10/06 12:55 pm)
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serendipity son...

I just finished watching il postino before signing in.

pjsnights 
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(5/10/06 1:55 pm)
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i bought il postino at the thrift store a year or so ago and FINALLY got to watch it (my family doesn't do subtitles).

i love that movie.

pj

Nicholas J
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(5/10/06 2:09 pm)
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I always do subtitles.

In fact to make sure that I get it all...
After the first viewing, the next are all done with the sound turned down and the closed captioning on.

e john e 
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(5/10/06 2:18 pm)
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everything is metaphor

is a powerful thing to say and think

it's like the opposite of writing a poem, almost

it's a tremendous interaction
between "out there" and "in here"

vivifying and creative,
instructing and delighting

johning




Nicholas J
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(5/10/06 2:22 pm)
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yeah...

its like one vast poem out there...

and you just gently pluck or raggedly tear out sections as the mood strikes.

raysweat
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(5/10/06 3:11 pm)
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wonderful!

annaswirls
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(5/11/06 2:06 am)
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under the red clay dust
these hand scratched words of a love note
that fell from a hole in his coat pocket

Nicholas J
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(5/11/06 11:42 am)
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hmmm, you would have a rhyming couplet if you switched the last two words somehow.

NEILringsmith
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(5/11/06 4:20 pm)
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the chili is
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hah!
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