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e john e 
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(5/5/06 12:55 pm)
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then there's this


time in my life when nothing works
and it lasts for years all those years
i find without looking people passing
stores where the signs are all crooked
churches locked and fenced i have no
notion to carry me further along in these
discoveries who sent me and where do i go
schools have different names and my fingers
not properly calloused to play the guitar
in those years when nothing works i can't
sing i like to walk at night all night
this time in my life when there are no incidents
only weeks or more at a time this sort of time
imbeds itself in every moment now
not days or hours
but moments a little piece of a missed funeral
all of this time


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Nicholas J
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(5/5/06 1:08 pm)
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I like...

Dorothy D Mienko
Dorothy D Mienko
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(5/5/06 1:13 pm)
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beautiful- really really beautiful.

raysweat
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(5/5/06 4:18 pm)
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oh goodness

talk about nailing the ending...

yes indeed.

nativedancer
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(5/5/06 5:48 pm)
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john, this reels out like bog seger's main street. mood, setting, action, all accomplished with such grace and beauty.

Tasha1 
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(5/5/06 5:55 pm)
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yes. what Dot said.




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citizenRKane
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(5/6/06 9:55 am)
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it's hard to see a grown man cry.
it's harder to make words pinch memory.

quixotik 1
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(5/6/06 10:10 am)
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it spoke as a robot

sorry



QUIXOTIK

Kerri Rochelle
Kerri Rochelle
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(5/6/06 3:03 pm)
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A lovely this, this is.
And time resonates through this poem.


"time in my life when nothing works"

and the images about people passing
and:

"stores where the signs are all crooked
churches locked and fenced" ( I love that image)

and no more need of discoveries about

"who sent me and where do i go"

Oh, those questions about who sent me and where do
I go...You sneak in that line so quickly and quietly.
I love that. People sometimes miss the quiet lines that
that say so much.

and I love those last lines:

"this time in my life when there are no incidents
only weeks or more at a time this sort of time
imbeds itself in every moment now
not days or hours
but moments a little piece of a missed funeral."

...that little piece of missed funeral is powerful.

kerri



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