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e john e 
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(5/5/06 12:07 pm)
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quick poem


i
was
thinking
about you


when the sky
went dark
but lit by

moon

how
angels sing!

another
matter


lit by spring
i nearly didn't
notice until
some po
et wrote
some t
hing


that triggered me i read it
on an internet poetry board
actually this whole thing is a lie


the
fancy
dancing
softly
soft


inside i'm
roaring i'm
thinking
of you


~


5 5 06


Nicholas J
Junkheer
Posts: 609
(5/5/06 12:36 pm)
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ah...

well...
when a person is full...
what can they do

but burst?

take a

leak...

or dump

but then that

just shit and
piss

aint it.

that's it
either you wait for
the prostate to fail
and lose the pressure behind the stream

or you bust a sphincter.

Edited by: Nicholas J at: 5/5/06 12:38 pm
nativedancer
Dot
Posts: 174
(5/5/06 12:47 pm)
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i loved this john, but fuck the other poet; keep it all yours, more like:

i
was
thinking
about you

when the sky
went dark
or seemed to

but still lit by spring
and i thought how
the angels sing!

nah
actually this whole thing is a lie

the
fancy
dancing
softly
soft

it's spring inside too
lit up like lightning
and i'm
roaring out loud
thinking
only of you

Edited by: nativedancer at: 5/5/06 12:50 pm
e john e 
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(5/5/06 1:00 pm)
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New Post shit
how did that other poet get in there?
i was sidetracked, i think,
and i know i wanted to sort of
get this place
in there, sort of

but you might be right, jim
as regards the poem

thanks


john

Dorothy D Mienko
Dorothy D Mienko
Posts: 350
(5/5/06 1:14 pm)
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I agree it is fine
make it all your own

yea.



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