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e john e 
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(4/20/06 2:26 pm)
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Big Business


Anyone can talk themselves into success,
or maybe I should say: everyone does,
no matter aptitude, talent, perseverence -
any of the incidental graces we say we are
blessed with. Talk is the pipeline,
the cargo carrier tough enough to do the job,
if the specs are right. I know I did.

What comes from a pitch, an equation,
a list of rules? I'm not sure. But speech,
yes, speech can bring you face to face
with a monkey, bring you to birdspit soup,
an expense account, a free lunch. Sure,
there is such a thing as a free lunch,
only sometimes it's on the other side
of our world. But forget about all of that,

I know I did. Tired of talking opposing language,
tired of watching people dance steps that rock
from harpsichords to harmonicas, Bach to blues;
this is not talk, this is not success. Success comes

when we finally shut up, stop flying, just breathe,
only look into green eyes, strain for the whisper
which makes us foreign, yet for that straining, and
for the listening, remembered perhaps, sold without
a sale, dare I say loved.


~


4 20 06



NEILringsmith
enil
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(4/20/06 3:48 pm)
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i don't know how to summarize here ...
maybe i do.
this seems more johnish than anything
i can remember in a while ... it's healthy
and hopeful and has all sorts of organic
vitality oozing out of its pores and such.

and did we mention fresh?
a write of the day.
if it's fresher than today, it's still in the cow's butt.

don't you wish you could be that focused all the time?
i know i do.
good show.
enil/neil

tam117
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(4/20/06 9:31 pm)
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john, this is wonderful. love it.

raysweat
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(4/20/06 10:26 pm)
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wonderful tapestry, pace and unveiling.

love it.

eden2000s
eden
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(4/20/06 11:00 pm)
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New Post i love this too.
the poem knows what to reveal and what to hide.

wondeful.

regards

eden

e john e 
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(4/21/06 11:15 am)
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New Post thanks for the neat responses
on this sober lil piece

i crazyglued my memories
of past overseas business trips
to some present-time reflections
as a lowly winery worker
and got this

as Pink Floyd/Steven Hawking sez:

Keep Talking



(too much sleep, finally, editing for typos, digits still dreaming)




Edited by: e john e  at: 4/21/06 11:16 am
Nicholas J
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(4/21/06 11:47 am)
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New Post Re: thanks for the neat responses
fall
stuttering
stumbling
bumbling
smiling
walking talking
running

in and out
of success

we all

all we

Kerri Rochelle
Kerri Rochelle
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(4/21/06 3:18 pm)
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Loved these lines:

"Anyone can talk themselves into success,
or maybe I should say: everyone does"

..."Talk is the pipeline,
the cargo carrier tough enough to do the job,
if the specs are right."

"Tired of talking opposing language"

Although, when I read that last line the first time
I read it too quickly and read it as
tired of talking the opposite language.

I love the line about success comes when we finally shut up
and just breathe and "strain for the whisper"

enjoyed this one, Johnee.









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